Great Job! There was a major transformation between this and your rough draft. I thought your use of music was really successful and you really got your message across. No suggestions!
Great job on this project, I thought your story was awesome and I feel like you covered a topic very important to the school. Furthermore the way you went about it was great getting everyones perspectives and mixing in their interviews seamlessly amongst one another. My only complaint is some of the interviews were kind of choppy and could have used a transition or to even if that altered some of the audio. But besides that you project was great and I think you did a fantastic job.
Ella- nice job! I really liked the parts where you were going through the buildings shutting off the lights. I also liked how when in the group meeting there were tons of people talking but you were able to hear clearly one person talking. I also likes the clips of the newspaper articles I think you could have left each one up a little longer just so we could read the headline and where the article was being posted from. Really nice job!
I thought you did a great job finding a lot of sources for this project and showing a wide range of perspectives. The only thing I'd suggest is to use more transitions when your jumping from one part of an interview to another, because without a transition, it looks a little choppy and abrupt.
Love the text transitions, it really helps to guide your project. I could still hear your voice in the background going "mhm" on some of the interviews and I admit, it's a bit distracting. The music montages were a nice touch, but I would have liked to have seen a bit more of the group actually turning off lights in buildings. The story clippings from various publications was a nice touch but I would have liked to have seen which publications were publishing what story (saw some like Foster's but again, just curious). Much better than your first draft overall, great job!
Awesome video! It really came together from two weeks ago and I think the additions/subtractions you made to it helped a lot. The music at the end really set the energy to show how this group is taking off in achieving its goal, so that ended up working really well to your advantage. The flow of your video really came along nicely, and your transitions are neat and clean. The pictures are vivid and the video is clear, however at some points I felt the voices could be a bit louder. Other than that, the only thing that seemed a little awkward was how you had music in the middle and then switched to almost a comedic scene of one of the members trying to find a light switch to a more serious interview with someone else. I think this could have worked better had you gone back to the music after the comedic scene for a moment for consistency and then switched over to the more serious interview. Besides that, great job. This is definitely a skilled work of multimedia and you can tell you put a lot of effort into it.
I thought this was very well shot and interesting. It gave the viewer a lot of insight into both the event and sustainability.
I thought the music was used very well in your video. It was upbeat, just like the student involved in this event. I also liked how you put in text screens here and there to give the reader more insight into the topic, and showing the articles at the end was also very effective. The only thing I would recommend changing is your voice in the piece. If you're going to have yourself in the video, make sure your in it more than once, otherwise it seems out of place. Also, watch all the "mhms"! Well done!
Ella, Your video turned out really well! I felt like I knew what was going on even without the writing on the slides in between some of the shots. I thought those slides were necessary in the beginning, but not so much at the end. The slide that told us you were following them while shutting off the lights didn't really seem necessary to me, but maybe that's just me. I think my favorite part was how you did the video images of all the articles near the end. It's pretty amazing how much has been written about this group and I still had no idea. So I thought that part was really effective.
Great job! I think your project really came a long way since the rough draft. The images and video of CAN members going into buildings and turning off lights really showed me their dedication to the cause and a better understanding of what it is they actually do! Also, the images from the press coverage were a great addition because I think that PR is a huge thing for a group like CAN. I might have edited out your audio clips because it was a little distracting from the people being interviewed, but other than that, awesome work!!!
You did a good job with this video. I though you did a really good job fitting all the interviews together and making it cohesive . I also thought that the text fits well in this video. The only thing that could be worked on is when you interviewed the chief dude. The viewer did not hear your voice throughout the video, it just seems a but akaward that we heard it, also the music. It just came on too abrupt and sudden, it could have flowed much better. Overall, You did an amazing job. You really capture the idea of this group, what they do and why they do it.
Great job with a difficult and challenging project.
Inclusion of the chief sustainability officer and his comments about the upsurge in student activism really help to put the story and the efforts of this group in context. It also makes it a more newsworthy story since it may signal the beginning of a trend.
Interviews have that jumpy thing Vinny was talking about in some places. You may want to go in and put in some quick transitions.
I love the turning off switches part…not sure you need the music, but I guess it might be flat without it. I would love to see the idea of this group as kind of a monkey-wrench gang made a little more obvious.
Again, to get the sustainability officer talking about "Inspiring and empowering." really boosts the value of the story.
Hi Ella :) I really liked this! You had a nice balance of faculty and students and great quotes from the leader of the sustainability office about students taking initiative. I think that broader context really drove home the purpose and impactfulness of the club. I was a little confused as to who the woman in the office was - another reporter? Maybe you could've explained where she was from or what news outlets covered CAN - why was it just on March 30? The text really helped and added a level of depth to my understanding the mission and drive of the org. I also really liked the montage of students turning lights off, but I would have liked there to be more footage, or slower, drawn out somehow. It was a bit rushed. Also, there were a few "mm-hmms" that weren't terribly distracting, but... Loved the music and the inclusion of the articles - nice piece overall!
Thanks Ella for sharing your video and knowledge with us on CAN. This final draft has improved immensely from the rough draft- great work! I like your addition of footage of CAN, especially the few members struggling to find the plug for the vending machine :) I liked the people you chose to interview- it was great hearing from more people to make this a well rounded video. I think you could work on the volume level- just try to make things more steady in regards to the music and interviews. I would watch your video and ask your self does this phrase actually add anything to the main point of my video? I think for the majority of your video it does- but some things I think could be cut to make room for more if you are thinking of getting anymore footage/interviews. Just little things like removing the "big thank you" slide from the end and making the font smaller for some caption (Photo credit: UNH Photo Services" will make your video more appealing and less distracting. I think you have a great video, a lot to work with, and a really good point so I would not like little things like that to distract from your video. Adding stills in the choppy sections of some of the interviews may make for a smoother video also and brake it up for the viewer to keep them super interested. Great job Ella, honestly :)
I liked how the essence of CAN - youth, activism, etc. - played into how you built the project. The music and montage matched their enthusiasm while the interviews with UNH officials ensured the audience knew that CAN was serious about their efforts.
Lyon's (correct name?) "I have this huge spreadsheet" move into him at a workstation with the spreadsheet in the background transition is one of those little things that separates good storytellers from the pack.
Only two areas could be improved: possibly longer montage (add another 20 seconds after the vending machine stop) and transition between video edits of the same person (straight edits cause slight "teleport")
Great Job! There was a major transformation between this and your rough draft. I thought your use of music was really successful and you really got your message across. No suggestions!
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Ella,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on this project, I thought your story was awesome and I feel like you covered a topic very important to the school. Furthermore the way you went about it was great getting everyones perspectives and mixing in their interviews seamlessly amongst one another. My only complaint is some of the interviews were kind of choppy and could have used a transition or to even if that altered some of the audio. But besides that you project was great and I think you did a fantastic job.
Ella- nice job! I really liked the parts where you were going through the buildings shutting off the lights. I also liked how when in the group meeting there were tons of people talking but you were able to hear clearly one person talking. I also likes the clips of the newspaper articles I think you could have left each one up a little longer just so we could read the headline and where the article was being posted from. Really nice job!
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job finding a lot of sources for this project and showing a wide range of perspectives. The only thing I'd suggest is to use more transitions when your jumping from one part of an interview to another, because without a transition, it looks a little choppy and abrupt.
ReplyDeleteLove the text transitions, it really helps to guide your project. I could still hear your voice in the background going "mhm" on some of the interviews and I admit, it's a bit distracting. The music montages were a nice touch, but I would have liked to have seen a bit more of the group actually turning off lights in buildings. The story clippings from various publications was a nice touch but I would have liked to have seen which publications were publishing what story (saw some like Foster's but again, just curious). Much better than your first draft overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Ella,
ReplyDeleteAwesome video! It really came together from two weeks ago and I think the additions/subtractions you made to it helped a lot. The music at the end really set the energy to show how this group is taking off in achieving its goal, so that ended up working really well to your advantage. The flow of your video really came along nicely, and your transitions are neat and clean. The pictures are vivid and the video is clear, however at some points I felt the voices could be a bit louder. Other than that, the only thing that seemed a little awkward was how you had music in the middle and then switched to almost a comedic scene of one of the members trying to find a light switch to a more serious interview with someone else. I think this could have worked better had you gone back to the music after the comedic scene for a moment for consistency and then switched over to the more serious interview. Besides that, great job. This is definitely a skilled work of multimedia and you can tell you put a lot of effort into it.
I thought this was very well shot and interesting. It gave the viewer a lot of insight into both the event and sustainability.
ReplyDeleteI thought the music was used very well in your video. It was upbeat, just like the student involved in this event. I also liked how you put in text screens here and there to give the reader more insight into the topic, and showing the articles at the end was also very effective.
The only thing I would recommend changing is your voice in the piece. If you're going to have yourself in the video, make sure your in it more than once, otherwise it seems out of place. Also, watch all the "mhms"!
Well done!
Ella,
ReplyDeleteYour video turned out really well! I felt like I knew what was going on even without the writing on the slides in between some of the shots. I thought those slides were necessary in the beginning, but not so much at the end. The slide that told us you were following them while shutting off the lights didn't really seem necessary to me, but maybe that's just me. I think my favorite part was how you did the video images of all the articles near the end. It's pretty amazing how much has been written about this group and I still had no idea. So I thought that part was really effective.
Hi Ella,
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I think your project really came a long way since the rough draft. The images and video of CAN members going into buildings and turning off lights really showed me their dedication to the cause and a better understanding of what it is they actually do! Also, the images from the press coverage were a great addition because I think that PR is a huge thing for a group like CAN. I might have edited out your audio clips because it was a little distracting from the people being interviewed, but other than that, awesome work!!!
You did a good job with this video. I though you did a really good job fitting all the interviews together and making it cohesive . I also thought that the text fits well in this video. The only thing that could be worked on is when you interviewed the chief dude. The viewer did not hear your voice throughout the video, it just seems a but akaward that we heard it, also the music. It just came on too abrupt and sudden, it could have flowed much better. Overall, You did an amazing job. You really capture the idea of this group, what they do and why they do it.
ReplyDeleteElla:
ReplyDeleteGreat job with a difficult and challenging project.
Inclusion of the chief sustainability officer and his comments about the upsurge in student activism really help to put the story and the efforts of this group in context. It also makes it a more newsworthy story since it may signal the beginning of a trend.
Interviews have that jumpy thing Vinny was talking about in some places. You may want to go in and put in some quick transitions.
I love the turning off switches part…not sure you need the music, but I guess it might be flat without it. I would love to see the idea of this group as kind of a monkey-wrench gang made a little more obvious.
Again, to get the sustainability officer talking about "Inspiring and empowering." really boosts the value of the story.
Hi Ella :) I really liked this! You had a nice balance of faculty and students and great quotes from the leader of the sustainability office about students taking initiative. I think that broader context really drove home the purpose and impactfulness of the club. I was a little confused as to who the woman in the office was - another reporter? Maybe you could've explained where she was from or what news outlets covered CAN - why was it just on March 30?
ReplyDeleteThe text really helped and added a level of depth to my understanding the mission and drive of the org. I also really liked the montage of students turning lights off, but I would have liked there to be more footage, or slower, drawn out somehow. It was a bit rushed. Also, there were a few "mm-hmms" that weren't terribly distracting, but...
Loved the music and the inclusion of the articles - nice piece overall!
Thanks Ella for sharing your video and knowledge with us on CAN. This final draft has improved immensely from the rough draft- great work! I like your addition of footage of CAN, especially the few members struggling to find the plug for the vending machine :) I liked the people you chose to interview- it was great hearing from more people to make this a well rounded video. I think you could work on the volume level- just try to make things more steady in regards to the music and interviews. I would watch your video and ask your self does this phrase actually add anything to the main point of my video? I think for the majority of your video it does- but some things I think could be cut to make room for more if you are thinking of getting anymore footage/interviews. Just little things like removing the "big thank you" slide from the end and making the font smaller for some caption (Photo credit: UNH Photo Services" will make your video more appealing and less distracting. I think you have a great video, a lot to work with, and a really good point so I would not like little things like that to distract from your video. Adding stills in the choppy sections of some of the interviews may make for a smoother video also and brake it up for the viewer to keep them super interested. Great job Ella, honestly :)
ReplyDeleteI liked how the essence of CAN - youth, activism, etc. - played into how you built the project. The music and montage matched their enthusiasm while the interviews with UNH officials ensured the audience knew that CAN was serious about their efforts.
ReplyDeleteLyon's (correct name?) "I have this huge spreadsheet" move into him at a workstation with the spreadsheet in the background transition is one of those little things that separates good storytellers from the pack.
Only two areas could be improved: possibly longer montage (add another 20 seconds after the vending machine stop) and transition between video edits of the same person (straight edits cause slight "teleport")